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How to describe a kiss in creative writing

How to write a kissing scene that melts your readers’ hearts (plus juicy sex scene advice)

Why is all of your real-life romance exciting, while your kissing scenes read so lame?

Whenever you were the protagonist of romance in real life: Palpitations, edginess, Learjets… I mean, butterflies in your stomach. Or at least steamy windows in your eyes.

Shallow words, predictable actions, and empty shells of emotions.

Why is that? And how can you get to the heart of what makes a kissing scene exciting, and transfer that onto paper? How to write a kissing scene that will truly accelerate your readers’ pulse?

Not an easy task. But this post will equip you with all the tools you need. Read on to get answers to these questions:

  • How can you stay far, far away from any cliché?
  • What are some excellent tricks to let your readers feel the love?
  • Why is awkwardness your best friend?
  • How can you take advantage of your personal experiences as secret wonder weapons?
  • And yes, it’s gonna get juicy and steamy too in the end…

But before we get into it, read this kissing scene and tell me what you think:

Heavy rain was pattering down on the streets.

“Wait, wait,” he suddenly shouted from behind, running after her. “You forgot something…”

Under her umbrella, she turned around surprised, with an expectant look on her face: “What is it?”

Panting he stood before her: “You forgot to give me a chance to tell you that I love you. More than I have ever imagined that I could love someone!”

“Oh, Mike!” She fell round his neck. Suddenly teardrops were mixing with the pouring rain: “I promise to love you forever, every single day of eternity,” she sighed. “Being with you is… like magic.”

They kissed passionately under the open sky, lost in a bubble of time and space, not even noticing the heavy waterfalls pouring down on them while they were getting soaking wet.

Did this scene touch you deeply? Did it get to you?

To me, it did nothing.

What you just read is a pile of clichés we have seen a thousand times before, all pressed into one single scene. I just fed you a learned code instead of serving you fresh fiction; yes, I force-fed you a learned code like traffic signals or like the bell that trained Pavlov’s dogs. The signals above are intended to get you salivating romantically… ring, ring!

Cliché setting? Check (“Heavy rain was pattering down on the streets.”)

Cliché expressions? Check (“I promise to love you forever, every single day of eternity”)

Cliché feelings? Check (“…I love you. More than I have ever imagined that I could love someone”)

Cliché comparisons and similes? Check (“Being with you is… like magic.”)

In short, the snippet above contains too many clichés and relies way too much on what the author thinks romance should look like.

Fiction needs to speak truth, it needs to be raw and bold and unconditional, it has to touch our inner beings – like love. It shouldn’t be a preformed template.

Here is the problem though: No feeling in fiction is harder to convey than love. That’s because being in love is a feeling that escapes any description – it’s too exciting; too strange; too magnetic; too rare.

Pain, joy, disappointment, anxiousness are all easier to describe than love. They are more one-dimensional, more common and in most situations not as overwhelming as love.

Because love is so difficult to describe, many writers circle around it. Instead of taking a shot at painting the feeling itself for you, they give you placeholders you recognize from movies: “Ah, they are saying they will love each other forever! That’s how it works in romance novels, so that must mean it’s a wonderful romance.”

This post aims to show you a couple of ways to craft more authentic kissing scenes, drawing from deep inside, step by step.

And once you have gulped down all of the theory in gallons (or litres), I have something really cool for you:

The How to Write a Kissing Scene Template

Download this How to Write a Kissing Scene template to make sure you include the spiciest ingredients in your own kissing scenes. The template will guide you through your entire scene. Just print it out and fill it in, so you have everything ready at one glance. It also contains short reminders for the most important points of this post.

How to get rid of all of the clichés and write a heart-felt kissing scene

When you are writing a kissing scene, you are Cupid in the sky. You are flying high above your two love-birds with your bow and cutie locks. It’s your challenging task to bring them together with the power of your pen and arrow. Look:

It’s like you were mixing your protagonists a love potion with several ingredients. You don’t always need to include all of the ingredients, the following are just offerings. But the more of them you use, the stronger your love potion will be…

Let’s see which parts make for an irresistible kissing scene, from beginning to end:

1. Setting the Scene: Let Your Guy and Girl Talk Differently

There is a big misconception about men and women.

Maybe it’s just a misconception of language, because when somebody says, “Men and women are equal,” they are only half right: We are equal in value, but not equal in nature.

We don’t feel alike. We don’t act alike. We don’t talk alike.

For example, can you quickly tell if the following phrase likely comes from a man or from a woman?

“Do you think he/she looks better than me?”

How about the following one, man or woman?

“If he does this again, I will teach him some manners!”

Call me biased, but the first phrase is much more likely to come from a woman, and the second much more likely to come from a man. Women just tend to be more concerned about their looks, and we men have big egos…

So the first step is to keep in mind to lend different voices to your boy and your girl. Let the differences between man and woman get into your scene.

2. Early Stage: What do your lovers have in common? Let them explore!

There is one thing all romances share in real life, and that’s definitely not a cliché: It’s the lovers’ commonalities.

The salt in the soup of any romantic encounter is discovering what you have in common:

Tom and Marry are discovering how they have both seen every single season of that awesome TV show. Or that they both love mountaineering. Or that a trip to India shaped both of their values.

Richard and Barbara are discovering that they both share the same thoughts about happiness. Or about marriage. Or about Donald Trump.

Floyd and Lara are discovering that they share that annoying tick of opening public doors only with their elbows (germs!). Or that they are both doctors. Or that they both want to move to France one day.

What excites them is not as important as why it excites them though. The point is the feeling they share: Maybe spending time on majestic mountains gives them a sense of freedom and purity. Maybe they both became doctors to help people. Or because they felt pressured to become something “better” by their families. Discovering that the other one exactly understands them will make their eyes light up.

Let them talk about how they feel, and what their passions and fears are. Then let them feel that strong affection when they feel understood and “at home.”

3. Early Stage: Desires, Hopes and Dreams

Nothing connects more than sharing the same vision. If you can get your characters to get excited about each other’s dreams, you will be a potent love wizard. Admiring who the other one is or what they can do, can also make your characters desire each other.

Mara wants to be a DJ, and she admires James’ passion and talent for painting; he wants to live off his art one day.

Rudy is working with Amnesty International and wishes for world peace. He likes that Sally has a big heart for stray dogs. They find that they would love to go on a charity mission to Africa together one day.

This entire point is just a sub-item of the previous one. As it’s such a strong ingredient in your potion, it deserves to be emphasized.

4. Heating it up: Yes, make it awkward!

When you are really attracted to somebody, you want them to feel the same. That often makes you insecure and shy. So don’t be afraid to show some awkwardness!

If you display awkwardness in your scene, it will make your readers remember their own romantic experiences and connect even more. Plays right into your cards, Julia (or Romeo)!

But insecurity only comes up once they really like each other and have something to lose. So only insert that awkwardness once your lovers-to-be like other.

Here are some possibilities for awkwardness: Your characters could talk about how much they like the other one.

Or they could share something so private it makes them feel uneasy.

Some signs for awkwardness: Your characters could be beating around the bush, or even stuttering; some body language you can use: Fidgeting, kicking the ground, turning away, neck touching, avoiding eye contact, etc…

And of course… the big, red-eared, tight-lipped mother of all awkwardnesses: Dead silence…

5. Heating it up: Less is often more

Don’t always let your characters plainly say what they mean!

The finest notes in good love scenes are often articulated without words. And sometimes the lovers bring out their thoughts delayed or in short form. It’s because their situation feels like a tight-rope act. A lot of desires, reservations, suspicions and fears play into romance.

Kissing scenes are ideal to use some hidden meaning! Your figures have very believable reasons not to talk. It could be awkwardness, reservation, or just that they don’t know what to say next.

Maybe they think they have to say something and suddenly say: “This is a nice place here!” or “It’s hot today!” You know, the stuff people say when they don’t know what to say…

Operate with unspoken words, silence, a sentence too short at the right time. Like I showed you above, you can let body language speak for itself.

This technique should force your reader to read between the lines; to turn on her own imagination, which is the most amazing thing you can do for her. Let your reader watch her very own movie!

Here is a quick example:

“Sometimes I feel like there is nobody to turn to,” Joe said, “like… like the world is an empty place. Do you know what I mean?”

Scarlet just stared at her shoes.

6. Still heating it up: Draw from your embarrassingly private experiences

Movies and TV shows hold pre-canned experiences ready for us. But don’t commit the error we just talked about in the introduction. Don’t fall back on clichés just to make it easier for you, or because you feel like you don’t have the ability to describe something with your own words.

That would be like sidestepping the challenge.

Instead, draw from your private treasure trove of experiences.

In other words: Risk something!

Drawing from your own past experiences is a great way to avoid clichés and to make your kissing scene raw and real. The more it makes you cringe to write about them, the better. Go where it hurts!

You have a broad range of emotions in your arsenal as a writer: Anger, hurt, attraction, admiration, enthusiasm, guilt etc… Let your characters draw from all of this. Love is complicated.

Try to express things the way they felt to you personally when you were there, not in the way you have seen in movies or read in books.

For example, do you have an ex-suitor or boyfriend who had a hard time expressing his feelings, and that made you undesired and confused you? Or did you try to kiss a girl and she turned her head away, even though she was clearly attracted?

Use these bits and pieces!

Oh, and one more thing. Try not to use the word “love” in your scene. It’s so overused it has become one giant cliché in itself. You can find it everywhere, be it in movies, novels or song lyrics, not to speak of oversized ads or everyday language.

Instead of using the word “love,” just describe what love does to your characters. That will make a lot more impact. It will make you become a better writer.

Using your private experiences means that you will have to get naked and expose bits and pieces of your private feelings for everybody to see. Luckily, nobody knows which parts stem from you personally and which parts you just made up. And contrary to an actor, you don’t have to pour out your soul directly in front of an audience. You have the laptop screen between you and your readers to protect you…

7. Boiling over: The Kiss

Are you ready for the kiss…?

It is what this whole buzz allegedly is about: Two people pressing their lips against each other, gnawing and sucking. It’s supposed to be good.

Make sure to introduce the kiss at a high point:

Gerry hears how sweet Gina says he has a cute smile… and leans forward to kiss her.

Randy has to laugh about a cute joke Laura makes and playfully motions her to come closer, so he can kiss her.

Noah confesses to Olivia that he has loved her for eighth months, but never had the guts to tell her… and he leans forward for the kiss.

Make sure the kiss is the cream topping on a remark, a notion or an idea that we have heard the moment before.

8. Going even further: Steamy Windows

You still want more? Oh, you! What kind of smut are you looking for? He he…!

You can always just cut your scene before any sex part, and just hint at the sex. But if you want to include sex in your scene, the trick is to make it not prude, but not too graphic either. Hm, how about this?

He was with her like a bee that landed on a flower.

Not really… besides its over-the-top cheesiness, it’s also very prude. This text is scared of what it wants to describe. And the following one?

He [xxx] and [xxx] her [xxx], pressed her down and [xxx] [xxx] [xxx].

Nope; unless you are a porn director… That’s too hardcore.

So you will have to find a middle way, and without sounding cheesy. How about this:

He could feel her soft, warm body underneath him, and he caressed her thighs, while he slowly began to thrust inside of her.

And there you have it… your complete kissing scene that will get under your readers’ skin. Now it’s time for the cigarette after. And also to download this awesome template:

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The How to Write a Kissing Scene Worksheet

Make this worksheet the backbone of your kissing scene. Just fill it out, and you will have the most important ingredients of your scene ready at one glance. Then you can concentrate on writing your scene (it also summarizes the most important points of this post):

Kissing Scene Writing Prompt

Owen and Paola are two waiters at a diner. They have been flirting for a while. During a smoking break amongst dusty storage cartoons, they finally kiss. Describe the scene!

You can insert anything that’s described in this post: A commonality that brings them together, some desire they lay out (maybe to get out of that greasy diner?), a bit of awkwardness, maybe silence, one private moment from your own love life, and finally what we all came for: The kiss!

Just write out two paragraphs of the scene, a snippet that tells us what this is all about.

Then post your prompt in the comments. Yes, just do it, seriously! I will give you a kiss for it.

By the way, you can find some really fun romance writing prompts here. The page is a massive collection of 63 detailed creative writing prompts for all genres and occasions.

Harness the Power of Being Real

With this post, you now have it in your hands: Describing an extraordinary kissing scene that will go deep under your readers’ skin and remind them of their own past loves. Download that template, and go way past clichés, to the raw and real core of a beautifully crafted love scene.

Love is the most amazing feeling we have – and if your story shares a heart-melting kissing scene, you have an unforgettable tale at your hands…

Images: Header Image: LuckyN/Shutterstock; Cupid in the Sky: rangizzz/Shutterstock; Romance: Ganna Demchenko/Shutterstock; Bee: succo/Pixabay

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65 Comments

It’s hard to read the content on this page because the social-sites icons, e.g., Facebook, Twitter, etc are covering the content. Very annoying!

That should definitely not happen. Which device are you reading the post on (mobile, desktop, browser, etc…)? If you can give me more info, I will look into this to avoid it next time.

For now, my guess is if you change your device, the text will look fine.

The main issue is the left margin of the content is about 30 pixels. The social media buttons look to be about 50 pixels wide. So there’s an overlap somewhere in the neighborhood of 20 pixels

That’s fine for windows over about 1100 pixels wide. (It can tested with a desktop browser, making it wider and narrower to see the effect.)

It’s also fine for windows less than somewhere around 500 pixels wide. At that point, the social media icons pop to the bottom of the page.

Thanks for this, Will, I will get it fixed as soon as possible.

This really helped me a lot as I am a new writer and have just started writing. I hope that I am able to keep up with all these tips.

Hi Amber, that’s good to hear.

Don’t put too much pressure on yourself with trying to implement all of this. Just take one or two things out of the post for your next love scene, and then maybe another tip for the love scene after that.

The most important thing is for you to keep writing. And this post won’t go away anytime soon, you can always come back to it to refresh your memory.

@Ellie, no it’s not (on desktop). Please still be polite to the author. Anyway, you can hover below the crown icon in the social buttons and see the DOUBLE ARROW which you can click to hide these buttons. Hope it helps. Have a great day to everyone

Yes, blue double arrow.

Anyways, I took care of it, and the problem should be fixed now.

Thank you Alex. Very useful.

Nice, Chris. Cheers!

Very helpful guide. But here is a challenge for you: Try rewriting this article, but this time let your lovers be of the same sex. I don’t think too much will change but you will have to “kiss” a few more cliches goodbye.

I love that idea! While writing the post, it did feel a bit weird to ignore all same sex romance. I can’t make the post too long though and have to stick to what most readers write about, which is man/woman.

But send me your rewrite when it’s done!

I posted a clip of my story, which is lesbian. This is my first time actually sharing my work.

I was actually hoping you would redo the clichéd scene and put it at the end of this post to show us how to put it all together. But great post nevertheless. I like your sense of humor! :]

Well, one can hope… But you could give it a try yourself (and maybe even post it here).

Thank you, Alex! this couldn’t have come at a better time. I’m trying to write the first kiss between my hero and heroine.

Good to hear. Go for it, Carrie!

A quick draft, but I think it has potential:
———
I expected the same forceful kiss, the same inept groping, the same “I think I’m falling in love” grunts, the same neediness. The same disinterest after his load gets popped.

And that’s exactly what I got.

I scooted down the stairway in a mental turmoil of “when will things ever change!” and burst onto the sidewalk.

Literally burst, as in barging into a guy and popping the party balloon he was carrying along – both of us decked on the sidewalk, me on top.

He saw right through me. Maybe it was my smeared lipstick. Or the one gaudy stocking. Or the lingering semen smell.

“You know, so long as you continue popping guys who live above storefronts, you’ll continue being their tool. Maybe it’s time to turn things around. Make the guy your tool.”

That’s what he said. To turn things around!

And here I was, lying on top.

His occasional squirm tells me he was getting uncomfortable being squished between my weight and the hard sidewalk. But I didn’t move. Didn’t want to. Perhaps couldn’t, right then. The biological fluids were coursing through my body with a power I’ve never experienced before.

I looked into his eyes. He knew that I knew he was uncomfortable. And I knew that he knew I was something wickedly turned on.

When he smiled, eyes alight, I smashed my lips onto his in the first kiss I ever controlled.

Oops. As I reread your article, I see you were asking for a writeup of the scene in the writing prompt. Read too fast, the first time, or just didn’t notice because I had my own scenes in mind. So the above can be ignored.

Won’t be ignored. This is a writing blog, and you are always welcome to post your writing.

I loved the storytelling, fun scene, and you are taking an unusual angle. Some language problems though, e.g. you are switching times (“His occasional squirm tells me…”). But it made me smile and is exactly what the post is talking about. Thanks for posting!

Alex, it took me 2 weeks to get over the “language problem” comment :). (No, not at all. I appreciate it. Been updating my website and, unfortunately, everybody else’s sites seemed less important.)

Something about first drafts. I tend to read them over and congratulate myself for the unique and effective turns of phrase and emotion-magnet story line and go have myself a beer in celebration. Then several days later I reread the draft and deflate all the way flat to the floor. Isn’t it a weird self-delusional trait I have?

Anyway, been putting popcorn stories on my website (100-400 word stories, fiction or non-fiction). Don’t know whether or not your system allows URLs in blog posts, so I won’t post it. People can click my name. The first popcorn story is the story about how and why popcorn stories came to be and gives a better description of what a popcorn story is (and is not).

Thank you for your kind comment about the story.

I see an email just arrived with a notice you have another blog post, about mad creativity, a guest post. Will go have a read.

Hey, maybe I’ll accept guest popcorn stories, like some bloggers accept guest posts. Gotta think about it.

Hey Will! Popcorn story, that sounds so movie-like. I want to lean back in my velvety seat and read, read, read away.

One link per comment is fine; any more than that and the comment won’t pass the spam filters.

Yes, popcorn does have pleasure associations with movies. Also with my childhood when Mom would make popcorn on the stovetop in a special saucepan. It had a handle in the lid that turned a wire along the bottom to dislodge stuck kernels. Called, as expected, a popcorn popper. She would tell a story while the popcorn was being heated to occupy us kids so we wouldn’t get fidgety for how long it took (in kid time). Although we expected it, our eyes always bugged out when the popcorn volume got so big it lifted the lid right up from the popcorn popper an inch or two.

Here’s the page with the popcorn story that describes what a popcorn story is and how and why the category was created.

The more I think about it, the more I think I’ll be publishing guest stories in the not-too-distant future.

Great resource and advice, Alex! Will definitely try it out with my current WIP. Thanks!

great coaching. In the second book in my series I will be writing same sex (male/male), sex scenes. With your template I can create it with little or no struggle. So appreciate your posts. They always make a difference.

The template is helping you, nice!

Good writing for your gay love scenes, that’s a challenge, and it’s good you are going for it.

I’ve been interviewing my male gay friends. Gets a little uncomfortable at times, but they are forthcoming and eager to participate. It’s an adventure. Thanks again.

When I lived in Madrid for a year, I had two gay guys as roommates (they were not a couple). It all works a little bit differently with them.

When you want to be a writer, nothing beats life experience.

Oh My Goodness. This article can heat up anyone. The way you explained the kissing scene followed by the sex can make anybody horny in minutes. There are bad erotic writers who follow the cliché as you mentioned. They do not open up and experiment. That’s the major problem. Excellent stuff and will definitely check out your kissing scene worksheet for my project. Thank you for sharing this.

Not sure if this heated up anyone around here, but if you felt it, use it for your love scenes. Cheers!

Alex, thanks so much for this timely post! I’ve got a proposal scene (protagonist & boyfriend) in my book with a kiss involved of course. Your suggestions will help make it better. Plus I haven’t yet worked up the first kiss. I’m on the right track though with no worn out love words. Christine

Hey Christine, a proposal scene is the perfect opportunity to inject a big dosage of romance into your story, so to speak… Nothing more romantic than “I want to spend my life with you.” Good to hear the post helps you.

Thanks, Alex! Happy to say I had the boyfriend figiting & anxious, & the protagonist dazed. Yay On the right track. Having fun with it! Christine

Wow, what an excellent post. Everyone may not say out their interest on reading a kissing scene but everyone has a desire of reading. And readers get involved in such scenes only when the writing is such great. But writing these romantic things is not so easy. This post definitely helps the writers to improve their romantic writings.

True, romance scenes attract us as readers like nothing else. Especially female readers. Nothing better than some stars in the eyes and a little heartbreak.

Hey Alex. Here’s a draft of the scene prompt. Didn’t really give me that umph, but well, it helped.
Do let me know what you think, thanks!
———————————————
The first bell rang. Paola groaned, taking a long draw at her cigarette stub.
“Five minutes.” Owen casually puffed a cloud of blue-gray smoke into the musty air. “Then back to hell.”
“Why do you have to remind me that all the time?” Paola shifted uneasily, the dusty carton leaving a smudge on her stained white shirt. She started to brush at it, when Owen laughed.
“What’s so funny, idiot?”
“Will Ben really notice that? I mean, the shirt’s as filthy as hell already; why bother trying to clean it?”
“That’s something that makes working at this place shittier. Who allows waiters in greasy shirts serve fat guys greasy food in order to make them fatter and disgusting?” Paola grunted, and dragged at her stub, pushing her wild hair from her face.
“Well, I am fat and disgusting,” Owen chuckled, rubbing at his less-than-flat belly.
“That’s from all the drippings from the grill Bill gives you every time you go place an order.”
“Sorry, can’t help it. Just like you cant help wishing you’d be out of this place.” He stretched and let out a long sigh, releasing another puff of smoke.
Paola took the cigarrete from his stained fingers, tossing hers aside. “I should have never tod you that,” she muttered, her dark eyes narrowing as she gazed at a speck of dust floating in the air.
“I also should have never told you that it was my dream to have a diner of my own.” Owen sat up, and shifted his feet uncomfortably. “It fuelled the hopes you have of leaving this muck.”
“Yes it did, Owen.” She turned to face him, and noticed his eyes flick to the floor. “I saw your ambition, your hope, and I felt like I needed that as well.” He looked up at her, the shafts of sunlight from the grubby window turning his amber eyes into gold pools.
The second bell rang. Two minutes.
“Well, we better get back to work, Paola.” He stood up, took a stretch and held his hand out to Paola. She took it, and he helped her up to his feet. “Ready to face hell?” He grinned at her. She gave a small smile.
He pushed her hair away from her face. For a moment, the silence held them in its grip. She realised he was still holding her hand. She realised she had tightened her grip on his. Her burnt cinnamon eyes, his the golden colour of fresh frying oil. The smell of cheap tobacco on their breath, mingling with the faint must of mouldy carton boxes.
A strand of hair fell forward, over her forehead. Owen pushed it back, and pulled Paola closer, closer until he felt her lips on his. The taste of him almost revolted her, but beneath the tobacco she tasted desire. Did she also sense her own, mingled with her smoky spit? He felt her fingers dig into the soft flesh on his back, then run into his thick woolly hair. She sensed his large hands on the small of her back, pulling her closer, closer…
The bell rang, startling them out of their passion. Their lips glistened with saliva, their eyes glazed over. Paola let out a small laugh; Owen smiled at seeing one of her rare moments of happiness. “Idiot,” she said to him
“Paola.”
“I think,” she started, setting her hair in place, “that I can now face hell.”

Eddie, this is great! It has everything, from psychology to drama to pacing, surroundings, senses… It includes what this post was busily preaching, and a touch of novelty too. Cudos to you!

How to Write a Kissing Scene

You’ve gotten to that heart-melting part, the deliquium-inducing moment, the juiciest scene of the story: the kissing scene. It’s the moment you’ve been waiting for and I’m sure your readers will be as anxious.

If you ruin this kiss, you’ll ruin the reader’s mood and the story. So you have to make sure that the kiss is perfect, a kiss that your readers can feel.

Writing a kissing scene is like kissing; you don’t have to rush things unless it’s just a kiss born out of lust—that can come out of anywhere.

Whether your characters or readers know about the imminent kiss or not, you’ve made all the plans and have set everything for them to kiss and then they finally do, and for your readers, it was worth the wait.

But how do you write such a good kiss? Here are some tips.

What Type of Kissing?

What type of kiss are we talking about?

We have to be clear about the kind of kiss we are talking about here. I think a kiss that initiates or happens during a romantic relationship should be different from a kiss that happens out of pure lust. The difference between a romantic kiss and a mere steamy lustful kiss is in the build-up. A kiss that is part of a romantic relationship needs to be set up in such a way that there’s some anticipation from the reader. Before we get to the kiss, you need to delve into the attraction between two lovebirds. It’s this attraction that will set the right tone for the kiss.

And… a kiss in a classic romantic novel should be different from a steamy kissing scene in an erotic story.

Expressions for a Kissing Scene

The secret weapons in a writer’s arsenal (when it comes to writing romantic or intimate scenes) are word-building, the flow, showing the characters’ emotions and reactions. Of course, to get these things right, you have to use the right adjectives.

Almost any adjective can work when describing a kiss, but some describe a kiss better than others in most scenes. Here’s a list of adjectives that help you describe a kiss:

Intimate, fervent, gentle, fierce, fiery, sensual, brief, bruising, stolen, sudden, sweet, swift, burning, deep, delicate, passionate, delicious, demanding, desperate, hearty, heated, hungry, innocent, intense, lingering, long, possessive, scorching, searing, secret, silent, sloppy, slow, tender, tentative, thorough, toe-curling, thrilling.

Body Language for a Kissing Scene

Heads: If it’s the first kiss, you might intentionally let characters kiss without tilting their heads. Otherwise, they have to tilt their (like we usually kiss) to avoid clumsy bumping of foreheads.

Eyes: Are the eyes open or closed? If the eyes are open, there’s an implied awkwardness and if they’re closed, we can assume that it’s an affectionate or tender kiss. If one character kisses another out of the blue, you could indicate that the stunned character doesn’t close their eyes to show the awkwardness of the kiss. You can also use eye gaze to indicate that the characters are about to kiss. If one character notices the other affectionately looking at them, and they lock eyes, there might be a kiss coming.

Lips: Oh yes! The lips! Lips are central to the whole kissing scene unless you say that your story’s characters are aliens and they don’t have lips? You have to describe the lips, talk about how soft, smooth or chapped they are. You can also write about lipstick or write about whether the characters are good kissers.

Tongues: I think there’s a line you cross with tongues. Simple, quick, or first kisses usually don’t include tongue. For erotic stories though, tongues are normal, but I wouldn’t relish reading a kissing scene with such kind of description.

Hands and Touch: The position of the hands can convey a message. Where are the hands? Wrapped around the lover’s waist, faces, caressing the hair? Again, by design, you could have the hands softly clenched and not holding to anything to imply an awkward or surprise kiss. You could also have one character’s hands all over the body of the other character. And when you want to transition from a mere kiss to a sex scene, the hands can start to slither down the other character’s back or starts to touch sensitive places.

Noses: Noses are invading appendages that get in the way of perfect kissing. Henceforth, no kiss is perfect so don’t write them that way. Noses will always get in the way. Even when your characters tilt their heads, noses can still brush the side of their faces. Now, your characters will probably not notice them (unless they’re the type to notice everything) unless they have an awkward kiss.

Breathing and Heartbeat: Breathing and heart rate indicate intensity. A racing heart or rapid breathing usually works, you can also indicate that a character had to take a breath to indicate that it was a long kiss.

Bodies: No body language without bodies, right? You can indicate whether the characters are pulling closer or pushing away or whether they are clenched tight or flowing loosely.

Leaning in: One character has to take the lead, lean in to initiate the kiss. But I love it when there’s some nice awkwardness, then they both slowly lean together and… mwah! We have our kiss.

Using Metaphors and Similes and No Clichés

Is it necessary that I define metaphors and similes? Well… you never know how convenient such obvious explanations can be.

“A metaphor is a figure of speech that describes an object or action in a way that isn’t literally true but helps explain an idea or make a comparison.”

“A simile compares two things that share a common feature. The words “as” and “like” are used to compare the two things.”

Metaphors and similes help you make your story lovelier and they help you seize the reader’s attention. By using these two, you avoid using simple and boring technical descriptions. It’s like painting Picassos without doing much by figuratively describing the characters, their actions, and the scenes.

Although metaphors and similes help you spice up your writing style, they can fill your writing with lots of clichés. You must use them in the right proportions; too many of these metaphors and similes will make your writing way too theatrical. You’d be lucky if your leaders didn’t notice that you just added too many spices; otherwise, they’d just drop your story and move on to something else.

Try to come up with your own metaphors and similes to avoid littering your writing with clichés. Your readers are not waiting to read something so clichéd like:

  • Her lips, sweet like morning dew. [Simile].
  • Judy’s lips were like summer rain. [Simile].
  • She fell in love with Johnny, the bad apple. [Metaphor].

How to Write a Kissing Scene in Steps

1. Set up the Perfect Scene

You have to set the right tone for the kiss. Make sure the characters have chemistry, you can make the characters have something in common—whether it’s morals, similar backstory, or similar aspirations. As they say, opposites attract, you can use different personalities to draw the characters to each other.

Whether you choose to write a kissing scene that is completely unexpected or a kiss that your reader can anticipate, you have to create the perfect moment. The two characters might discover that they both love Friends and have seen every episode of every season.

Or they love traveling, share similar political views, they both love hiking. Whatever can be used to bring the two characters together.

2. Introduce an Action That Will Eventually Culminate In a Kiss

The magnetic pulls have been created, now you have to set up moments that’ll lead to the kiss. You need to describe the moments that’ll culminate into the lips touching.

Do they bump into each other in the corridor? Are they on a couch watching tv?

3. Create the Awkwardness

So you’ve made the characters come together. Now you have to make them notice that they’re attracted to each other, and there should be an aura of awkwardness.

When you’re attracted to someone, you always want to be close to them, cuddle or kiss. However, there’s always this awkwardness that engulfs the first moment when you both realize you’re attracted to each other. You can utilize this in your kissing scene, it will make your readers relate as the scene might remind them of their own romantic experiences.

If you include awkwardness in your scene, your readers will be reminded of their own romantic experiences and will feel even more connected.

4. Up the Heat!

The kiss is upon us! Finally, the awkwardness is about to boil over to a kiss. The character—depending on their personalities or intensity of their feelings for the other—will either become super nervous or confident.

You can use things like rapid breathing, racing hearts, sweaty palms, et cetera. To rope the readers in, you have to use some of your romantic experiences or expectations. If you try to describe this part the way it goes down in movies, you’re going to ruin it—like 9 out of 10 times.

5. Kiss! Kiss! Kiss!

Your characters are now ready to kiss. You have to make sure that moment of the kiss has to reflect a real-life kiss. To achieve this, you use descriptions that touch on all of the five senses: touch, smell, sight, sound, and taste.

In your description of the kiss, you can touch (lips, hands, bodies), the warmth of the characters’ mouths and body (if they are tightly embracing each other), the smell of their breath, and the tenderness and taste of their lips.

6. The Pull Away

The way the kiss ends can be determined by the way one of the characters felt about the kiss or by some random thing. Whatever it is, the kiss has to end.

If one character is surprised by the kiss and they don’t like it, they might push the other away. Or they might just pull away after a good long kiss.

Perhaps, something might interrupt them—someone walks in on them, a knock on the day, an overexcited dog attacks the lover.

Whatever happens, the kiss is over and the two have to endure the aftertaste. Was the kiss good? Did they like it? Does it worsen things or improve them?

The kiss might be a starting point of a great relationship or an end to a relationship that wasn’t supposed to go beyond the friendship phase.

How to Graft Dialogue into Kissing Scenes

Dialogue can play a big role in making your kissing scenes juicier and improve the flow of your kissing scene writing.

Dialogue is a fundamental element to the build-up; it adds to the heat of the moment and makes some silent implications on the characters’ feelings about the whole moment. I’m not about to dish you some sex education, but even in real life, it’s good to talk when you’re making love.

Have a look at how dialogue has been used as part of the build-up and the pull away.

Scene 1: Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows by J.K. Rowling

[There was a clatter as the basilisk fangs cascaded out of Hermi- one’s arms. Running at Ron, she flung them around his neck and kissed him full on the mouth. Ron threw away the fangs and broomstick he was holding and responded with such enthusiasm that he lifted Hermione off her feet.

“Is this the moment?” Harry asked weakly, and when nothing happened except that Ron and Hermione gripped each other still more firmly and swayed on the spot, he raised his voice. “OI! There’s a war going on here!” Ron and Hermione broke apart, their arms still around each other. “I know, mate,” said Ron, who looked as though he had recently been hit on the back of the head with a Bludger, “so it’s now or never, isn’t it?”]

In this scene, Harry interrupted the kiss by reminding the two lovebirds of the ongoing war.

Scene 2: City of Glass by Cassandra Clare

He bent down, his lips against her cheek, brushing it lightly—and still, that light touch sent shivers through her nerves, shivers that made her whole body tremble. “If you want me to stop, tell me now,” he whispered. When she still said nothing, he brushed his mouth against the hollow of her temple. “Or now.” He traced the line of her cheekbone. “Or now.” His lips were against hers.

“Or—”

But she had reached up and pulled him down to her, and the rest of his words were lost against her mouth. He kissed her gently, carefully, but it wasn’t gentleness she wanted, not now, not after all this time, and she knotted her fists in his shirt, pulling him harder against her. He groaned softly, low in his throat, and then his arms circled her, gathering her against him, and they rolled over on the grass, tangled together, still kissing.

Top 3 First Kiss Scenes in Books

Here are the best 3 kissing scenes from books. Obviously, there are better kissing scenes in other books that I haven’t encountered, but this is the list I came up with based on the ones I have read so far.

Kisses in books:

1. Starry Eyes by Jenn Bennett: Zorie and Lennon

“You want to know what I think?” Lennon says, head dipping lower as he tries to get level with my eyes. “I think that if the uni­verse were trying to keep us apart, it’s doing a shitty job. Because otherwise, we wouldn’t be out here together.”

“I wish we weren’t!”

“No, you don’t,” he says firmly.

“Yes, I do. I wish I’d never come on this trip. I wish I didn’t know any of this, and I wish—”

Without warning, his mouth is on mine. He kisses me roughly. Completely unyielding. His hands are on the back of my head, holding me in place. And for a long, suspended moment, I’m frozen, unsure of whether I want to push him away. Then, all at once, heat spreads through me, and I thaw.

I kiss him back.

And, oh, it is good.

2. When Dimple Met Rishi by Sandhya Menon: Dimple and Rishi

Rishi reached out and casually tucked a strand of her hair behind her ear, and without meaning to, she sucked in a breath and leaned into his touch.

His brow cleared, and his eyes turned to honeyed fire as they drifted down to her lips, which, she noted, were now parted. It was like her body was this traitor, acting without her brain’s permission. Especially considering what you were thinking earlier, that annoying voice tried to interject. Are you seriously going to let hormones get the best of you when there are important things to consider?

But when Rishi dipped his head down and pressed his mouth to hers, his rough stubble scratching against her chin in the most delicious way, her brain shut up entirely. His arms wrapped around her waist, cinching her to him, and she put her hands in his hair, feeling the silken strands between her fingers.

3. The Cage by Megan Shepherd: Cassian and Cora

“His chin started to tilt towards hers. His lips parted. ‘I want to know what it feels like,’ he whispered. My god. He was going to kiss her, and it was so wrong, and so was how badly she wanted him to…She kissed him back, showing how a kiss was meant to be, though she hardly knew either. He learned fast. His people might not kiss, but she could tell by his heart thumping under her that he enjoyed it, that he responded to it the same way humans did.”

Kiss and Tell!

I can ramble on and jog about how to write a heart-melting kissing scene, but it all boils down to the masterly and sincerity of the writer.

A good kissing scene is not too flowery or a Hollywood-Esque, but one that reminds your readers of their own romantic experiences. The easiest way to make your kissing scene boring is cluttering it with clichés or trying to be King Solomon.

Whether you’re writing a purely romantic tale or not, an extraordinary kissing scene can win you some loyal readers.

About Jessica Majewski

Jessica started off as an avid book reader. After reading one too many romance novels (really. is it ever really enough?), she decided to jump to the other side and started writing her own stories.

She now shares what she has learned (the good and the not so good) here at When You Write, hoping she can inspire more up and coming wordsmiths to take the leap and share their own stories with the world.

How to describe a kiss in creative writing

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In today’s article we’ll learn:

  • How to write a romantic & steamy kissing scene
  • Descriptive adjectives and expressions for a kissing scene
  • The difference between YA (Young Adult) and NA (New Adult) and their approach to kissing and romance
  • Describing a kissing scene from different POV (Points Of View) first and third person narrative
  • Integrating similes and metaphors in kissing scenes
  • Integrating dialogue in a kissing scene
  • How to build momentum for a kissing scene in writing
  • Examples of kissing scenes in novels

And let’s not wait a second longer and dive (lips first) into the kissing booth.

Before setting the scene, we have to build momentum (friction, drama, tension, stolen glances between your characters, etc.). If you’re writing Romance, it’s clear your novel should be sprinkled with enough smooching to satisfy readers of the genre, however, YA or NA power couples never have it easy.

There will always be obstacles in the way of their happily ever after: Edward is a vampire, Christian Grey has his demons, Peeta and Katniss are supposed to kill each other in the Hunger Games, Peter Kavinsky’s fake romance with Lara Jean starts as a total playoff to make his ex jealous.

And don’t even remind me of Jace and Clary – they find out they are brother and sister!! Jamie and Claire come from different centuries, I mean OMG!

Defining the clear obstacles only add to the story, so before they start “playin’ kissy-kissy, smoochy-smoochy, talkin’ mooshy-mooshy bout nothin’” the author needs to introduce the characters, the key traits that make their personality unique and take them through some ups and downs before getting them lip-to-lip & toe-to-toe.

Another important factor to keep in mind when writing a kissing scene is your readership. If you’re writing in the Romance genre, readers want romance. For Fantasy, Science Fiction, Street-lit, etc. the emotional development between the characters is prevalent and the romantic physical interaction is mostly present as a nice cherry on top of everything else.

Although not set in stone, NA novels tend to be a bit more graphic with the physical description of the evolving romance because the characters are at that age when they can be experimenting with sex, relationships, etc. That doesn’t necessarily mean erotica, there can be sex without going in deep into the motion of the ocean.

YA on the other hand is usually at the first love stage. While the Twilight saga is all about the innocence, butterflies and no sex before marriage, the Lux saga is all the opposite, featuring Kat and Daemon in full makeout mode throughout the story, and therefore plenty of kissing to go with it.

What Kind Of Kiss Are We Talking About?

Defining the type of kiss is imperative, so let’s tackle the difference between a romantic vs a steamy kissing scene. If what you’re writing has a romantic element to it and your characters have fallen for each other, you need to build that much desired anticipation before the kiss, those initial elements of attraction that will set the tone for the rest of the story.

And if you’re curious to find out What Makes A Novel Romantic, Steamy Or Erotic , click away.

Now, back to how to write a kissing scene:

Carl kissed Lucy twice.

If this ain’t the village bulletin board, then you need to elaborate on that because there’s nothing we love more than reading a fab kissing scene.

Maybe time stopped when his lips met hers , but the flutter only intensified . Lucy’s heart pounded in her chest as her knees got weaker . She could only focus on how soft he felt against her mouth, how addictively he invaded all her senses .

It still wasn’t clear if she dreamed this moment to life, but there was raw emotion in the way his fingers curled around hers . Carl kept his eyes half open, sneaking a guilty peek at her every time he came back for air, just to make sure this wasn’t a product of his imagination.

He wasn’t sure if nature rooted for this moment or if his mind tricked him into a perfect present , but every breath he took smelled like jasmine and for the first time since he’d known himself, he didn’t feel shy. If anything, the warm feeling of her breath, although destabilizing, was inviting . This time around he draped both arms around Lucy’s small frame and met her lips again halfway.

That’s more like it. There’s flutter, an accelerated heartbeat, the weak knees. The word-building paints a picture of how both characters are feeling, and although the focus is not on the kiss itself, it is on the growing emotion between the two.

Now let’s take the same characters and heat things up just a notch:

Heat rose from Lucy’s stomach to her chest . Carl’s lips were getting closer and her heart decided to skip a beat , the smell of him hypnotic beyond reason . She parted her lips and felt him washing over like a wave of warmth , curling her toes, unfurling all her senses as the taste of him nearly silenced all thoughts.

Her whole body tingled , the feel of his frame leaning on hers as his arms wrapped around her felt nearly forbidden. He pulled her in, claiming her mouth again, hungry and intense, until her knees gave in. By the time Lucy became aware of her fingers, they had already slipped under his shirt, his skin smooth and radiating heat.

As if time had sopped right there , as they stood propped against his car, glued to one another. As if no one else existed and there was no risk of her parents watching the show from behind their curtains. And for Carl, as if he’d never been shy to begin with.

The focus switches from not only the emotion unfolding between the two, but how their bodies react to the kiss, making this scene a tad more steamy than romantic. The examples above are 3 rd person narrative.

Both Carl’s and Lucy’s perspectives are being described, so you can safely move between the emotions of your characters as long as the transition is smooth and you don’t make it read like a table tennis match.

The secret when it comes to writing a kissing scene is in the word-building, the flow, the cascading of emotions and chain reactions which trigger feelings, inner turmoil and realization. There are tons of ways to describe kissing in writing, these are only a few examples.

A kiss can be: fervent, fierce, fiery, brief, bruising, burning, deep, delicate, delicious, demanding, desperate, gentle, hearty, heated, hungry, innocent, intense, intimate, lingering, long, passionate, possessive, scorching, searing, secret, sensual, silent, sloppy, slow, stolen, sudden, sweet, swift, tender, tentative, thorough, toe-curling, thrilling;

The body language when kissing is extremely important. Revealing how your characters react to each other is imperative:

  • time stopped in a collision of senses when his lips met hers
  • her heart skipped a beat; she gasped/moaned/made a throaty sound
  • her knees gave in/ he weakened her core
  • his fingers moved/explored/traveled/sank in her skin with a mind of their own

When the kiss is happening don’t neglect:

  • The inner turmoil (stomach twisting in a knot, fluttering, insecurity or overconfidence)
  • The surroundings (introduce your characters, set the tone, build the intensity, the smell, sound)
  • Becoming aware of the partner (their smell, the feel of their skin, hair, features, what they are wearing, touch)
  • The following actions and the emotions they trigger while the lips are in perfect sync (the hyperventilating, knees melting, brain death, LOL)

Metaphors And Similes

I feel like these two deserve a lot of attention because they help color your writing and achieve that desired effect which really pulls the reader in. It allows you, the author to figuratively paint the most accurate picture of your characters and the scene you are describing by avoiding simple, (boring) technical descriptions.

It’s what helps you provide that vivid imagery and spices up your writing style. Pay attention though, playing with the right proportion is key as too many metaphors and similes can achieve a much too theatrical effect. And because beauty is in the eye of the beholder, your beta-readers are going to notice if you went overboard or managed to stay afloat in this alchemy of description.

“A metaphor is a figure of speech that describes an object or action in a way that isn’t literally true but helps explain an idea or make a comparison.”

Carl is a bad person.

Carl is a bad apple . / Carl is the black sheep in his family. (metaphor)

I don’t like Carl.

Carl is the Monday of my life . (metaphor)

Carl is a good kisser.

Carl’s kisses are black holes pulling you in until all gravity is lost under his touch. (metaphor)

“A simile compares two things that share a common feature. The words “as” and “like” are used to compare the two things.”

Lucy has great lips.

Lucy’s lips were like a Summer rain, pouring over his as if they had the power to take away and give back life. (simile)

Carl is infatuated with Lucy.

Carl looks at Lucy like at his very own Mecca in the flesh. (simile)

(Kissing) Scene Management For 1 st Person and 3 rd Person Narrative

The difference here is that the 1 st person narrative places the reader in the main character’s shoes while 3 rd person narrative puts the reader in the same setting as the characters, as a spectator.

Third person narrative (although described as an outsider looking in) is more offering, given that you can describe more than one point of view. I don’t believe in a completely detached 3 rd person narrative, and I found it as an appropriate choice for Lost in Amber: An Out Of This World Paranormal Romance.

Let’s take one of the examples above and give it a makeover:

Heat rose from Lucy’s stomach to her chest. Carl’s lips were getting closer and her heart decided to skip a beat, the smell of him hypnotic beyond reason. She parted her lips and felt him washing over like a wave of warmth, curling her toes, unfurling all her senses as the taste of him nearly silenced all thoughts. She wanted more. (III)

Heat rose from my stomach to my chest and my heart definitely skipped a beat as Carl’s lips were closing in. The smell filled my nostrils to the point of near brain death. He was so close. That was it – at that very moment his lips brushed over mine like a wave of warmth and all my body reacted to him instinctively. My toes curled, my eyes zeroed in on his, his smell even more hypnotic. The taste of him… it silenced my thoughts and made me want more. (I)

What’s better, first or third person narrative? Well, I guess it all comes down to preference for both author and reader. As a writer, go with what’s comfy for your first novel, you’ll have plenty of time to explore more possibilities later.

Kissing Quotes From Books

And now, let’s see how other writers have tackled kissing. Here it goes!

“And then he’s kissing me back, open-mouthed, soft-lipped kissing-me-back, and at first I’m nervous, but then he puts his hand on the back of my head, and he strokes my hair in a reassuring way, and I’m not so nervous anymore.”

Jenny Han does an incredible job describing teenage love & angst. Although the romance started out as an innocent mutual agreement between Peter and Lara Jean to make Peter’s ex jealous & avoid any possible conversation between Lara Jean and Josh (remember the troublesome letter Josh accidentally received), certain feelings got in the way.

Three books and a Netflix success later, fans are still hyped over this young couple and Jenny Han’s talent to depict this very sweet story, cannot be ignored.

“He entered in a wave that hit her like a ripple of softener and rain as he slammed the door shut. She stood there, heart thumping in her chest, pressed against the wall as he’d seen her for the first time. There was no terror clouding her features, just the sound of her heart loud enough for him to feel, strong enough to overwhelm everything but those inquisitive green eyes.

She liked to talk and he didn’t; she was a hybrid and he wasn’t; she steadied herself and he didn’t, allowing the magnetic pull he felt within to pull him close to Zoey until the distance between their eyes narrowed along with the space between their bodies.

“I’d like to kiss you without asking permission, but I can’t…” She couldn’t control the flutter within, the lump in her throat, the violent heartbeat. “I shouldn’t…” He swallowed hard as his hand slid fast on the white satin, sending impulses to her spine as he pressed a little harder against her until their cheeks brushed. “I won’t…” he parted to look at her, “if you don’t want me to.”

Adrenaline rush. So much of it that she nearly forgot to breathe, eyes jumping from his lips to his eyes, her heart a ticking bomb.

Holy Mother of… She gave in, parting her lips only to feel his pressing like an artist’s brush against her canvas, intense, smooth but contained until her hands, with a mind of their
own, took hold of him and everything accelerated.

The kettle whistled. His thumb was throbbing at the hollow of her neck, rubbing up and down, pulsing warmth as his tongue conquered the depths of her mouth, hungry, consuming, pulling her into the warmth of him as if he mastered the balance of gravity.

“You shouldn’t have kissed me like that!” She found herself gasping, caught between an array of feelings and trying to regain sense in his arms.

His half-closed eyes were now wide open. “How…how would you like to be kissed?” An alarming curiosity washed over his features, he was scanning her for answers.

Zoey was stunned—at herself, at the amber flickering overpowering her consciousness, at the enticing flavor of the foreign lips she found herself longing for. It took a split second to give into them again, surrendering to the downward force pulling her under.

He pushed her upwards, allowing her legs to cross around his waist, and parted only to look at her flurried face, searching for reassurance. She did like being kissed.

Giddiness took over both of them as they mirrored a dumbstruck smile and
lightness. Whatever rush this was, whatever his lips brought, she wanted more.”

“Okay.” I bounced down the stairs. “I’m decent.”

He was waiting at the foot of the stairs, closer than I’d thought, and I bounded right into him. He steadied me, holding me a careful distance away for a few seconds before suddenly pulling me closer.

“Wrong again,” he murmured in my ear. “You are utterly indecent – no one should look so tempting, it’s not fair.”

“Tempting how?” I asked. “I can change . . .”

He sighed, shaking his head. “You are so absurd.” He pressed his cool lips delicately to my forehead, and the room spun. The smell of his breath made it impossible to think.

“Shall I explain how you are tempting me?” he said. It was clearly a rhetorical question. His fingers traced slowly down my spine, his breath coming more quickly against my skin. My hands were limp on his chest, and I felt ligtheaded again. He tilted his head slowly and touched his cool lips to mine for the second time, very carefully, parting them slightly.

And then I collapsed.”
Stephenie Meyer, Twilight Click here to get the book on Amazon.

Edward and Bella’s love is less on the PDA and more on the inner turmoil. Nevertheless, they do share plenty of quirky, adorable moments.

I forced a laugh. “I’m totally not attracted to you.”

Another step forward on Daemon’s side, and my back was against the wall. “You’re lying.”

“And you’re overconfident.” I inhaled, but all I smelled was him, and that did funny things to my stomach. “You know, the whole arrogant thing I mentioned. Not attractive.”

Daemon placed his hands on each side of my head and leaned in. A lamp was on one side of me, and the T.V. on the other. I was trapped. And when he spoke, his breath danced over my lips. “Every time you lie, your cheeks turn red.”

“Nuh-uh.” Not the most eloquent thing I’d ever said, but it was the best I could come up with.

His hands slid down the wall, stopping beside my hips. “I bet you think about me all the time. Nonstop.”

“You’re insane.” I pressed back against the wall, breathless.

“You probably even dream about me.” His gaze lowered to my mouth. I felt my lips part. “I bet you even write my name in your notebooks, over and over again, with a little heart drawn around it.”

I laughed. “In your dreams, Daemon. You’re the last person I think—”

Daemon kissed me.

There wasn’t a moment of hesitation. His mouth was on mine, and I stopped breathing. He shuddered and there was a sound from the back of his throat, half growl, half moan. Little shivers of pleasure and panic shot through me as he deepened the kiss, parting my lips. I stopped thinking. I pushed off the wall, sealing the tiny space between us, pressing against him, digging my fingers into his hair. It was soft, silky. Nothing else about him felt that way. I sparked alive, my heart swelled to the point of near bursting. The rush of sensations crawling across my body was maddening. Scary. Thrilling.

His hands were on my hips, and he lifted me up as if I were made of air. My legs wrapped around his waist, and we moved to the right, knocking into a floor lamp. It toppled over, but I didn’t spare it another thought. A light popped somewhere in the house. The TV turned on, then off, back on. Our lips remained sealed. It was like we couldn’t get enough of each other. We were devouring one another, drowning in each other.

We’d been building up to this for months, and oh my God was it worth the wait. And I wanted more.

Lowering my hands, I tugged at his shirt, but it was stuck under my legs. I wiggled down until my feet were on the floor. Then I got a hold of his shirt and yanked it up. He broke apart long enough to pull it over his head and toss it aside. His hands slid around my head, pulling me back to his mouth. There was a cracking sound in the house. A fissure of electricity shot through the room. Something smoked. But I didn’t care. We were moving backward.

His hands were moving down, under my shirt, his fingers skimming over my skin, sending a rush of blood to every part of my body. And my hands went down. His stomach was hard, dipped and rippled in all the right places. And then my shirt joined his on the floor. Skin against skin. His hummed, brimming full of power. I ran my fingers down his chest, to the button on his jeans.

The back of my legs hit the couch and we went down, a tangle of legs and hands moving, exploring. Our hips were molded together and we moved against one another. I think I whispered his name, and then his arms tightened around me, crushing me against his chest and his hands slipped between my legs. And I was swimming in raw sensations.

“So beautiful,” he murmured against my swollen lips. And then he was kissing me again. The deep kind of kisses that left little room for thought. There was only feeling and wanting. That was all. I wrapped my legs around his hips, pulling him closer, telling him what I wanted with my soft moans.

Our kisses slowed, becoming tender and infinitely more. It was like we were getting to know each other on an intimate level. I was breathless and dazed, unprepared for all of this, but my body ached for more than just kisses and touching—for more of him. And I knew he did, too. His powerful body shook like mine. It was easy to get lost in him, lost in this connection between us. The world—the universe—ceased to exist.”

Have a look at how dialogue has been integrated as a fundamental element to the build-up, contributing to the heat of the moment. Armentrout, you rock! Wish I read your novels before releasing mine. This YA is full of sexual tension between the main characters & it’s fast paced as well. A recipe for success.

“He bent down, his lips against her cheek, brushing it lightly—and still that light touch sent shivers through her nerves, shivers that made her whole body tremble. ‘If you want me to stop, tell me now,’ he whispered. When she still said nothing, he brushed his mouth against the hollow of her temple. ‘Or now.’ He traced the line of her cheekbone. ‘Or now.’ His lips were against hers.

But she had reached up and pulled him down to her, and the rest of his words were lost against her mouth. He kissed her gently, carefully, but it wasn’t gentleness she wanted, not now, not after all this time, and she knotted her fists in his shirt, pulling him harder against her. He groaned softly, low in his throat, and then his arms circled her, gathering her against him, and they rolled over on the grass, tangled together, still kissing.”

Talk about playing with the readers’ feelings! Cassandra Clare had our hearts shrink with the growing romance between Jace and Clary. When they found out they were brother and sister, I too was devastated. Her novels are on the adventurous side, action packed and great plot, the romance however, comes in small but intense doses.

“I was thinking there was something I wanted to try.” And he took my face in his hands again.
I couldn’t breathe.

He hesitated – not in the normal way, the human way.

Not the way a man might hesitate before he kissed a woman, to gauge her reaction, to see how he would be received. Perhaps he would hesitate to prolong the moment, that ideal moment of anticipation, sometimes better than the kiss itself.

Edward hesitated to test himself, to see if this was safe, to make sure he was still in control of his need. And then his cold, marble lips pressed very softly against mine.

What neither of us was prepared for was my response.
Blood boiled under my skin, burned in my lips. My breath came in a wild gasp. My fingers knotted in his hair, clutching him to me. My lips parted as I breathed in his heady scent.”

“His thumb brushes my lower lip, and I hear his breath hitch. He’s staring into my eyes, and I hold his anxious, burning gaze for a moment or maybe it’s forever… but eventually, my attention is drawn to his beautiful mouth… And for the first time in twenty-one years, I want to be kissed. I want to feel his mouth on me.”

Well, to be perfectly honest, I haven’t read Fifty shades yet, but it’s on my list!

“He took a step in her direction, feeling her accelerated pulse from the distance. “I could freeze you.” His voice was calm yet intimidating, like saying “dare me.”

She didn’t allow his eyes to disarm her. “I could fry you!” She pushed her chest forward in a menacing glare. There was determination in the way she said “fry” and he felt it plenty just hours earlier. He took another step forward.

She was trapped between him and the footboard of the bed. Half a step forward would cause immediate collision, sending her nose straight into his chest; half a step back and she’d land legs-up on her duvet cover, her oversized shirt not long enough to guarantee decency in the fall.

She could have moved to the side but she was struck by the proximity of everything he was, her senses subdued by this staggering rush of adrenaline, fluttering from her curls to her toes. There was no time for thoughts as she launched herself at his lips, letting go of whatever had taken hold of her seconds ago.

Transfixed, his thoughts were silenced by her taste as if taking an adrenaline shot, as if her lips sunk in a perfect fit, as if it wasn’t wrong. She did it again under his wide eyes and benumbing brain, too astounded to mentally process her actions yet bewildered at the response of his senses and how they surrendered under the witchery of her lips. The air got thinner.

Jasper’s lips crushed on hers unrestrained, he cupped her face with both hands as her fingers slid along the sculpted forearms to meet his for a brief moment until she nudged him forward, propelling them both onto her bed. Unlocking his lips from hers, he pulled her further up on the duvet solely to immerse himself in another kiss under her dilated pupils a second later.

Heat rose from every inch of himself he was no longer able to control. There was nothing but the sound of her gasps drawing him in, awakening something feral within. Whatever this was, it was pulling her in, the urgency of those perfect lips sinking in as if consuming her core, the way his body pressed against hers, warm and untamed. If hearts could explode, hers could detonate right now.

Insane. This was insane and he was half-mad for allowing it to happen. Instinct was not supposed to dictate over logic but, then again, that might just be another one of her superpowers. He’d never wanted someone so…violently.

There was a little inner fight with every button he released from the buttonholes of her loose shirt starting from the last in line. No room for words, yet she wondered why he seemed to be contemplating every button after she had sent his shirt and waistcoat flying in what she calculated as half a second. He sent her freckles ablaze as his lips made a run for her neck, melting into her flesh, making her moan.

Staring into her eyes made him feel guilty—guilty of being fully aware that she was now exposed under his touch except for her pink bikini briefs. Her hands were everywhere. He skipped a beat, straddling her in a swift move while cuffing her arms with a hand above the head, taking her again into the warmth of his mouth.”

“We are kissing like crazy. Like our lives depend on it. His tongue slips inside my mouth, gentle but demanding, and it’s nothing like I’ve ever experienced, and I suddenly understand why people describe kissing as melting because every square inch of my body dissolves into his. My fingers grip his hair, pulling him closer. My veins throb and my heart explodes. I have never wanted anyone like this before. Ever.

He pushes me backward and we’re lying down, making out in front of the children with their red balloons and the old men with their chess sets and the tourists with their laminated maps and I don’t care, I don’t care about any of that. All I want is Étienne. The weight of his body on top of mine is extraordinary. I feel him—all of him—pressed against me, and I inhale his shaving cream, his shampoo, and that extra scent that’s just… him. The most delicious smell I could ever imagine.

I want to breathe him, lick him, eat him, drink him. His lips taste like honey. His face has the slightest bit of stubble and it rubs my skin but I don’t care, I don’t care at all. He feels wonderful. His hands are everywhere, and it doesn’t matter that his mouth is already on top of mine, I want him closer, closer, closer.”

This one is also on my to read list, but the kissing scene is definitely promising.

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